11-24-2010, 03:22 AM
Hi Billy,
This is a very soft piece with some beautiful imagery. No real suggestions (Unless there was something you were worried about). It has great sonics. If I had to give you something at gunpoint I'd point to the last line and say while it's a wonderful testament to a relationship. I'm sure you could come up with something stronger.
That's all I've got Billy. It seems very solid to me.
Best,
Todd
This is a very soft piece with some beautiful imagery. No real suggestions (Unless there was something you were worried about). It has great sonics. If I had to give you something at gunpoint I'd point to the last line and say while it's a wonderful testament to a relationship. I'm sure you could come up with something stronger.
That's all I've got Billy. It seems very solid to me.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson