11-17-2010, 05:58 AM
(11-15-2010, 03:33 PM)addy Wrote: If it could be considered at all a critique, I found it too short and want more. The setup was really good, though i still wanted something between the second and third stanza where I could further relish the them and the contrasts it elicits, broadening the story further. But it's excellent, and the closing lines were pitch perfectthanks for the feedback addy.

