The Red Balloon (Revision Formerly: What Must Come)

[Todd]

Billy,

Thank you for the comments. I agree with you on cutting ever born. Also, I monkeyed around with the other line you called out for about 30 minutes today. After reading your comments I made another change...I think it works. What do you think?

Also, I grew up I think in the same hard-knocks poetry school as you did. I used to change things at almost any comment after awhile you learn to be able to take good advice (even recognizing good advice can be a godsend) and still pass on what doesn't work.

Thanks again,

Todd