11-14-2010, 03:19 AM
The penultimate line was very clever; I like how you structured the poem so that those three verbs would appear alongside each other. It is cliche, but that's a good thing, I think; it plays on the most familiar parts of our imaginations, creating a warm and happy song.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe