11-10-2010, 11:45 AM
Very interesting poem, I loved the subject and how you played around with it. I'm conflicted about the fourth stanza... I adore it, but it's a tad off from the rest of the piece (it more pontificated the idea rather than played with it). Still, on the whole it works very, very well. 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?