10-28-2010, 10:04 AM
Very moving verse, and short, which I enjoy; I like succinct poetry, and economy of language. You've clearly put thought into your line breaks, and the seperation of stanzas, and I don't think there's anything that I'd change. My favourite was the line beginning "glacial shift..." Some day soon I'll be able to properly critique your work
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe