Thanks for the feedback and kind words, Billy
I think that "rest's" is correct; when it comes to nouns, apostrophes are only used in the possessive sense.
"Like" doesn't contribute to the syntax, but as I was reading the poem aloud, it helped the flow, I thought. The original line was: "I always seem/to be descending," but I didn't like the repetition of "to" (I know, I'm mental).
i have a vague recollection of being in
school and we were always going down stairs. it never seemed as thouh we went up them
which of course we did.
it does have an Orwellian feel to it, a black and white snapshot effect.
is like redundant (seem=like)
I think that "rest's" is correct; when it comes to nouns, apostrophes are only used in the possessive sense."Like" doesn't contribute to the syntax, but as I was reading the poem aloud, it helped the flow, I thought. The original line was: "I always seem/to be descending," but I didn't like the repetition of "to" (I know, I'm mental).
i have a vague recollection of being in
school and we were always going down stairs. it never seemed as thouh we went up them
which of course we did.
it does have an Orwellian feel to it, a black and white snapshot effect.
is like redundant (seem=like)