10-27-2010, 11:04 AM
for me you need some
sorrowful rhythm maybe using 7 syls per line.
thats shows a bit of grief. (it's a dirge not a parody of a dirge
)
just- a-fright-ened--litt--le---girl,
dah-de-dah---de---dah-de---dah
fear-ful--of--a-fath-ers-smile
dah-de-dah-de-dah-de--dah
quick to-fing--er and de--file
dah--de-dah-de-dah-de--dah <----sorry jack i couldn't help meself
stalking her till sixty-four
when she waded out from shore
never did we see her frown
ne'r a person saw her drown
dah--de-dah-de-dah-de--dah......
sorrowful rhythm maybe using 7 syls per line.
thats shows a bit of grief. (it's a dirge not a parody of a dirge
)just- a-fright-ened--litt--le---girl,
dah-de-dah---de---dah-de---dah
fear-ful--of--a-fath-ers-smile
dah-de-dah-de-dah-de--dah
quick to-fing--er and de--file
dah--de-dah-de-dah-de--dah <----sorry jack i couldn't help meself

stalking her till sixty-four
when she waded out from shore
never did we see her frown
ne'r a person saw her drown
dah--de-dah-de-dah-de--dah......
