10-25-2010, 07:25 PM
Thanks for the kind words and feedback, Billy
This is quite an old poem, written several months ago, when I received some messages complaining that I used too many capitals, so my response was to remove them completely. Now what I usually do is cap just the beginnings of sentences, like you said.
Forgive me, but I'm not quite sure what people mean when they say a poem is very prose. Is it because there's no real poetic technique, like enjambment or rhyme or meter?
Thanks again for your kind words; they always mean the world when they come from you
Thanks for that great feedback Todd! I'd always thought the first and last verses seemed a little clunky, but up until now I'd assumed they were needed to make the poem complete. Looking at the piece without them, however, I really can see where you're coming from. The title leads well into that second verse, and the last as it is packs more of a punch.
Shit, I think I'm actually gonna go do an edit right now! Thanks again Todd
This is quite an old poem, written several months ago, when I received some messages complaining that I used too many capitals, so my response was to remove them completely. Now what I usually do is cap just the beginnings of sentences, like you said.Forgive me, but I'm not quite sure what people mean when they say a poem is very prose. Is it because there's no real poetic technique, like enjambment or rhyme or meter?
Thanks again for your kind words; they always mean the world when they come from you
Thanks for that great feedback Todd!
I'd always thought the first and last verses seemed a little clunky, but up until now I'd assumed they were needed to make the poem complete. Looking at the piece without them, however, I really can see where you're coming from. The title leads well into that second verse, and the last as it is packs more of a punch.Shit, I think I'm actually gonna go do an edit right now! Thanks again Todd