Two Poems Written in Philosophy Class

[Todd]

I've been meaning to get back to this one. I very much like what you did here. The first part has a dynamite ending and was an extremely fun read. Part two though, part two...

Wow!

I hate their clear voices,
their trendy fashions,
grey V-neck shirts
and red cardigans,
how they belong
in photographs
from student handbooks,
and glossy dramas
about college life.
I bet they drink and
go dancing together,
and hang around
outside lecture halls,
being young and being young.

This was absolutely perfect! Okay, okay one extremely minor nit (and it's only because I'm obsessive 99 out of 100 people I'm sure wouldn't care and saying all that I might be wrong)...Do you want to break:

I bet they drink and

on and. I think the line would be so much stronger just pulling the and down to the next line. (jmo). Okay that said, this poem is so, so very good. I almost think the concentrated power of poem 2 deserves to stand alone. The first poem is solid make no mistake, but the second one...god.

It reminds me a bit of Louise Gluck Mock orange with the opening.

being young and being young

Is a fantastic ending.

Thank you for the read. It was great.

Best,

Todd