judgement has 2 E's
were i a religious person my feedback would be different i'm sure.
these two lines didn't work that well for me;
dust infused with
the brilliance of your image.
biblically speaking aren't we supposed to be in his image?
other than that i think you did a good job of mixing science with religion.
verse 3, 4, 5, and 6worked really well for me. the 2nd verse feels just a little to much outside the rest of the piece even though you mention uniform motion. (i can't explain why)
the footnotes! not sure they work, non religious people won't be interested in them and those with knowledge of it should be able to see the connections.
the same with the scientific help.
jmo as usual, thanks for the read
were i a religious person my feedback would be different i'm sure.
these two lines didn't work that well for me;
dust infused with
the brilliance of your image.
biblically speaking aren't we supposed to be in his image?
other than that i think you did a good job of mixing science with religion.
verse 3, 4, 5, and 6worked really well for me. the 2nd verse feels just a little to much outside the rest of the piece even though you mention uniform motion. (i can't explain why)
the footnotes! not sure they work, non religious people won't be interested in them and those with knowledge of it should be able to see the connections.
the same with the scientific help.
jmo as usual, thanks for the read