Six Months in 1995

[Todd]

The final lines are deeply haunting. A morbid, vaguely perverse, but stunning string of images which resonate and help evoke those past six months. The syntax in these lines confused me a bit:

flash burns on walls etched
radioactive hieroglyphs
of a pregnant girlfriend.

I'm not sure what a good alternative would be. Perhaps put a comma after walls?
Other than that, though, nice poem

Hey thanks again. I appreciate you pointing out the syntax issues a comma probably would smooth out that line more. I appreicate your comments.

Todd