10-17-2010, 09:57 AM
(all JMO)
not a lot to pick at here, reads well, has good flow.
some really good imagery. the use of the tales fit the title well.
i loved these two lines;
I am no soot-haired commoner
fresh from the hearth—
if i had one nit it would be;
never, never, the teeth.
admittedly it breaks and makes the pause more substantial but for me it's makes the reader falter more than extend. all through the poem i can read and move effortlessly from one line to the next except for that one line.
other than that i think it a good vitriolic poem wrapped in wolfs clothing.
it's jaded and cynical and showing the character of a well used woman.
thanks for the read Todd
not a lot to pick at here, reads well, has good flow.
some really good imagery. the use of the tales fit the title well.
i loved these two lines;
I am no soot-haired commoner
fresh from the hearth—
if i had one nit it would be;
never, never, the teeth.
admittedly it breaks and makes the pause more substantial but for me it's makes the reader falter more than extend. all through the poem i can read and move effortlessly from one line to the next except for that one line.
other than that i think it a good vitriolic poem wrapped in wolfs clothing.
it's jaded and cynical and showing the character of a well used woman.
thanks for the read Todd