A poem and a question.

[heslopian]

I think you're trying too hard to be lyrical, and that disfigures your otherwise great sentences. Pare down your style, don't try too hard to look classical, express your ideas in a simpler way; trust me, they'll look more profound, as well as be easier to read. For instance, "In an abandon theatre, is the place she has come to dance." First off, it should be "abandoned," as "abandon" in this context is a verb, but I'm sure that was just a typo. Secondly, your swapping around of the sentence's two halves serves no practical purpose; it doesn't help the flow, and "dance" doesn't rhyme with the final word of any of the immediately succeeding lines. In my opinion, the sentence should be written like this: "She came to the abandoned theatre to dance."
This is a very good poem - dark, Gothic, haunting, sweet, personal, lovely, and strong - but the style of construction is too dense and complex (IMHO). I'd suggest applying my formula - simplify and re-arrange, remove words - to the other lines, and also, as Billy said, use more enjambment.