10-13-2010, 12:24 PM
Thanks for posting your poem Lizzy. This was put together nicely, and my heart really ached as it progressed ("so sad that she must dance alone").
In my opinion (just my opinion!) you could change the title... dancing with a mask is already a very clear and well-elaborated on image within a poem, so the way it is seems to make it too literal. I'm sure there are other lines you can use to capture the idea of the poem.
Lovely read.
In my opinion (just my opinion!) you could change the title... dancing with a mask is already a very clear and well-elaborated on image within a poem, so the way it is seems to make it too literal. I'm sure there are other lines you can use to capture the idea of the poem.
Lovely read.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?