Bus Stop Considerations

[billy]

drinking flat coke at the college bus stop,
my last chili dog still roaring through me,
a blaze of manic stallions,

good metaphor, good image,( i like how you left out like
chili the country, chilli the dog

I read some Allen Ginsberg verse,
recoil and smile at his use of ampersands
(being both a purist & a whore)

i know what the person in the verse means, i hate the buggers. (not too keen on ginsberg either) these lines work so well for me

and notice the flocks of fellow students,
marching like ants to the gym,
their perfect bottoms an accusation,
water on the soil before the parched Tommy.

again a metaphor instead of two similie, excellent and i like it. (though maybe being english helps me with tommy) you may look but you can't have. the simile is also a good one.

maybe this is how it feels
to be a clerk in a jewellery store.

a reinforcement of the can't have metaphore nicely done.

i found the poem to be entertaining, it shows a trait we all have, not so much envy, but a kind of hunger, like a kid in a candy store wanting everything and the mom just buys a newspape (old cliche i know but i'm putting it in a poem )

apart from the chilli spelling it was almost perfect, (for me)

you know what i like about a lot of your poetry. you make it personal, the homosexuality, the self doubt the all the other stuff and yet you don't make it overpowering. because you this, the poems (many of them) actually become more powerful.

anyway, i really like this one as well