Haiku

Haiku

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10-10-2010, 11:25 AM (This post was last modified: 10-10-2010, 11:27 AM by billy.)

(10-10-2010, 02:28 AM)Heslopian Wrote: through the window
dusk approaches
I smile then go

i like this one, for me its agood image with a feel of being lecherous
dusk could act as the seasonal word (winter; in hindsight autumn) and i love the last line.

i've re read it a few times since you deleted it and my comment and i like it even more than i did. nice one jack Wink

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Haiku - by heslopian - 10-10-2010, 02:28 AM

RE: Haiku - by billy - 10-10-2010, 11:25 AM

RE: Haiku - by heslopian - 10-10-2010, 11:27 AM

RE: Haiku - by billy - 10-10-2010, 11:35 AM

RE: Haiku - by heslopian - 10-11-2010, 12:26 AM

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