10-09-2010, 10:29 AM
you have two cut offs in the original.
and i agree with you about te first line.
try swapping lines fro a cleaner image/ ie;
brown grass
on small grave
nan leaves her flowers.
try not to use grammar
and i agree with you about te first line.
try swapping lines fro a cleaner image/ ie;
brown grass
on small grave
nan leaves her flowers.
try not to use grammar