10-09-2010, 10:02 AM
@billy - Thanks for the feedback and kind words
The haiku originally read:
Thumbnail tombstone,
browning grass -
Nan leaves her flowers. We go.
I thought the first line skirted a bit too close to metaphor, and a friend advised me that the last two words weren't really needed.
Great to know I'm getting there!
The haiku originally read:Thumbnail tombstone,
browning grass -
Nan leaves her flowers. We go.
I thought the first line skirted a bit too close to metaphor, and a friend advised me that the last two words weren't really needed.
Great to know I'm getting there!