Snake Oil

[heslopian]

I enjoy poems like this, with very short lines that descend like a stream of water. However, I think they work better without any punctuation at all. Commas and full stops interrupt the flow, lessening the manic intensity which makes this sort of piece. I'd recommend ditching them, even the question mark. I think billy's cleared everything else up.
Great poem, addy, angry and scary and true.