Faith Like a Child

[billy]

Thanks for the response.

As for the final line, I have to keep it, it's an allusion. If I changed it, it wouldn't recall the line from the Bible? I think?

I'll work on adding more images. Just wondering what you think the meaning is billy? Because I'm wondering if the reason you think that it feels telly and not full of images is because of the content of the poem, i.e. you feel you are being preached to because of the subject matter.

Because most of the poem is very concrete, and not abstract at all. Just wondered. I'm not saying I'm discounting your critique, but could you tell me what your interpretation of the poem is?

yep i agree, it's very concrete.
for me a bit too concrete. the bible makes good use of metaphor
and imagery. though many passages are preachy they often show rather than tell. your poem as a whole has a meaning that can be gotten from the words but the words are telly (preachy)

the child grows up, the child is god (your faith in him)
that god can protect you if you allow him to.
but for him to allow you to grow (within your faith) you must grow within him.

is what i get.

of course it can also be said that the poem is a celebration but for me it doesn't feel so, jmo

and if i get it wrong, thats good as well, a poem needs to be seen on many levels.