Leo in Love

[addy]

As Billy said, a neat and clean poem, rather like a short story, though not too much. Everything was pretty much just so. One quibble I do have, however, is with the simile: "like the delusions of constellations." How are constellations deluded?

I was trying to refer to the fact that constellations are a product of our imagination, brought about by the fact that we instinctively see patterns where in reality there are none. But you're right that as a simile the meaning is much too strained LOL

In its current form the poem is serviceable, but it obviously needs some rewriting. Thanks for the critique!