Summer
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(10-08-2010, 07:37 AM)Heslopian Wrote:  Not fond of the last line myself. It seems a bit too neat to suit the great imagery beforehand, and also surmises the poem's intent beyond what's required, I think. Aside from that, though, a wonderful piece; surreal and visceral, like a dream. I love short pieces like this.
Good point about that last line. Thanks so much for the feedback Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Summer - by addy - 08-09-2010, 02:52 PM
RE: Summer - by Bianca Alabaster - 08-11-2010, 09:52 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 08-11-2010, 01:57 PM
RE: Summer - by billy - 08-12-2010, 07:21 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 08-12-2010, 09:17 AM
RE: Summer - by heslopian - 10-08-2010, 07:37 AM
RE: Summer - by addy - 10-08-2010, 09:18 AM
RE: Summer - by Leanne - 06-10-2011, 02:48 PM
RE: Summer - by kath3 - 06-11-2011, 01:30 PM
RE: Summer - by addy - 06-14-2011, 05:12 PM
RE: Summer - by critical mass - 06-30-2011, 09:04 PM



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