10-08-2010, 09:18 AM
(10-08-2010, 07:37 AM)Heslopian Wrote: Not fond of the last line myself. It seems a bit too neat to suit the great imagery beforehand, and also surmises the poem's intent beyond what's required, I think. Aside from that, though, a wonderful piece; surreal and visceral, like a dream. I love short pieces like this.Good point about that last line. Thanks so much for the feedback
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
