01-26-2010, 06:04 AM
Thanks for the response.
As for the final line, I have to keep it, it's an allusion. If I changed it, it wouldn't recall the line from the Bible? I think?
I'll work on adding more images. Just wondering what you think the meaning is billy? Because I'm wondering if the reason you think that it feels telly and not full of images is because of the content of the poem, i.e. you feel you are being preached to because of the subject matter.
Because most of the poem is very concrete, and not abstract at all. Just wondered. I'm not saying I'm discounting your critique, but could you tell me what your interpretation of the poem is?
As for the final line, I have to keep it, it's an allusion. If I changed it, it wouldn't recall the line from the Bible? I think?
I'll work on adding more images. Just wondering what you think the meaning is billy? Because I'm wondering if the reason you think that it feels telly and not full of images is because of the content of the poem, i.e. you feel you are being preached to because of the subject matter.
Because most of the poem is very concrete, and not abstract at all. Just wondered. I'm not saying I'm discounting your critique, but could you tell me what your interpretation of the poem is?