10-06-2010, 04:16 AM
A strange but amusing poem. The rhythm doesn't always work - I stumbled over several times - but the rhyme scheme is good, and sometimes distracts from the disjointed flow. I'd recommend capitalising all of the singular "I" words, as they become small case towards the end, and to me that looks messy.
Other than that, though, funny and original.
I'm not that fond of nonsense verse, but I enjoyed this a lot. Thanks
Other than that, though, funny and original.
I'm not that fond of nonsense verse, but I enjoyed this a lot. Thanks

