Ode to the Silence of the Night

[billy]

A nicely done, disturbing story... kinda like an edgar allan poe tale which is half supernatural (or maybe supernatural), but mostly about psychological horror.Interesting treatment to make it archaic. All it needs is a polish to improve the structure. Read it out to yourself in proper style, and you'll be able to tell where the kinks in the rhythm are. Thanks for the read.

Appreciated, some of the kinks are intentional, so the the reader is thrown off and observes that particualr passage more closely. Also, perfect meter can get rather boring don't you think?

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to you'r question;

if you break meter intentionally it should still work. the disjoint in rhythm should have a point. or shouldn't lol. it's little like hopping. it should be obvious you're hopping instead of lurching on one foot. (in response to your question, not the poem)