10-05-2010, 04:26 PM
A nicely done, disturbing story... kinda like an edgar allan poe tale which is half supernatural (or maybe supernatural), but mostly about psychological horror.Interesting treatment to make it archaic. All it needs is a polish to improve the structure. Read it out to yourself in proper style, and you'll be able to tell where the kinks in the rhythm are. Thanks for the read.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?