Urbanised by William Marsland.

[billy]

thanks for the feedback addy
after touchstones feedback i have to agree that something needs doing and i also agree that with you on the numer of verbs (if thats what they are )
my solution is to get rid of as many gerunds as i can.
for instance;

flitting to flit

and

darting, diving, weaving

to

they dart, dive, and weave

and i'll sort out light to something else on the edit

once again guys, thanks for the feedback.