Same complexion, Different people

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Welcome back LB! Sorry to hear about your old account, but no worries as long as you can post again

I loved this one. The theme was heartfelt, thought-provoking, and beautiful. You're becoming more and more a deft and disciplined writer. Minor adjustments in punctuations and such, but on the whole a solid work.

Hello.. It's me formally known as Loveblindxo.


I don't know what happened to my account, but it wouldn't let me sign in. So, I just made a new account. I am back from a long hiatus! with a new poem =)

We are looked at as the problem
innocent people, similar complexion
to those hollow in the heart
yet, "no need for comma there" we are attacked with a million questions
when we, too "add comma here (or remove comma after "we")" are hurt

how are we to feel when we see
our brothers on tv
little children running wild,dumb founded "dumbfounded (one word )"
"American's hate us"

we rather be accepted
instead of ripped apart
our emotions "maybe you can choose a word more descriptive than emotion, since emotion can range from good feelings to bad ones" collapsing with the buildings
our tears falling with the planes

how do we comfort the lady
who has lost her fiance
when we look similar to the problem
how do we explain to a little girl her
father's flesh is ashes

how do we bounce back and continue to live
when we are plastered all over
television,news stands, busy streets
Everyone has opinions
Everyone talks
But, "no need for comma" no one ever realizes we are suffering too

our brothers are on tv
same complexion
but, "no need for comma" we are apart of the solution
rather than the problem
we are not our brothers
we are innocent people
hidden between the smoke "loved this last line "