08-18-2010, 08:22 AM
Nice title LOL 
Hmm... the only thing I would maybe change is that ending line. It breaks the rhythm of the rest of your poem,, and I think there's a way you can say you "inherited" the puppy but in a funnier maybe slightly tangential way.
Quite a black comedy piece
Hmm... the only thing I would maybe change is that ending line. It breaks the rhythm of the rest of your poem,, and I think there's a way you can say you "inherited" the puppy but in a funnier maybe slightly tangential way.
Quite a black comedy piece
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?