01-22-2010, 08:08 AM
Quiet and lovely.
One tiny thing I'd rephrase is the second line... "Scattered around my nightstand"... just drops, like its too literal compared to the other lines. Just a slight rephrasing would do. Again, its just an opinion, to take or leave
Great job.
One tiny thing I'd rephrase is the second line... "Scattered around my nightstand"... just drops, like its too literal compared to the other lines. Just a slight rephrasing would do. Again, its just an opinion, to take or leave
Great job.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?