07-31-2010, 08:20 AM
(07-31-2010, 03:46 AM)Loveblind Wrote: I`m fighting against a battle [i'm fighting a battle]good to see ya LB.
fighting like MLK did to stop slavery
fighting hard like Malcom x did [X]
or feminism in hopes for equality [or like the feminists in .......]
determined as rosa parks to finally be free [Rosa Parks]
fearful yet bold
like soldiers in Iraq keeping strong for our country
the only difference between them and I is that
I`m fighting against a battle that I am losing [I'm fighting a battle and I'm losing]
I am fighting to find myself [would I'm work better?]
the end threw me a little, i wasn't expecting it.
it was a pleasant surprise

for me it needs a small edit on the enjambment.
determined as rosa parks[Rosa Parks]
to finally be free
fearful yet bold
like soldiers in Iraq
keeping strong for our country
i really do like how show that sometimes the most important things in life
is ourselves.
as always LB, thanks for the read.
