Myself
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(07-31-2010, 03:46 AM)Loveblind Wrote:  I`m fighting against a battle [i'm fighting a battle]

fighting like MLK did to stop slavery
fighting hard like Malcom x did [X]
or feminism in hopes for equality [or like the feminists in .......]

determined as rosa parks to finally be free [Rosa Parks]
fearful yet bold
like soldiers in Iraq keeping strong for our country

the only difference between them and I is that
I`m fighting against a battle that I am losing [I'm fighting a battle and I'm losing]

I am fighting to find myself [would I'm work better?]
good to see ya LB.
the end threw me a little, i wasn't expecting it.
it was a pleasant surprise Wink

for me it needs a small edit on the enjambment.

determined as rosa parks[Rosa Parks]
to finally be free
fearful yet bold
like soldiers in Iraq
keeping strong for our country

i really do like how show that sometimes the most important things in life
is ourselves.

as always LB, thanks for the read.
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Messages In This Thread
Myself - by Loveblind - 07-31-2010, 03:46 AM
RE: Myself - by billy - 07-31-2010, 08:20 AM
RE: Myself - by altezon - 07-31-2010, 09:36 AM
RE: Myself - by addy - 08-02-2010, 06:59 PM
RE: Myself - by Bianca Alabaster - 08-11-2010, 10:41 AM



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