07-23-2010, 10:53 AM
Lovely read, this one. I like waking up like this 
(07-23-2010, 08:55 AM)billy Wrote: sunrise infects me
strokes and wakes
with oven hot mitts love this image
making pimples sprout erect I think "erect" is already redundant... we know that if gooseflesh rises its a given that its erect
you can see them/it what's them/it? (sorry, I only understood we were talking about sunlight)
fucking up a sightless face
working in unison
an invisible tag team
slapping me around
sunrise infects me
penetrates me cock-like
fucks me over deliciously
inseminating my waking hours LOL interesting imagery
with half life images "half-life" (i think)
of blacks on black
fizzling out sparkler-esque don't think you need to say it as "-esque"...
sunrise infects me
emotional sprinkler systems
whir and whiz
throwing emotional waters don't quite like the repetition of "emotional"... I know it's probably style, but I don't see it adding anythingonto the fire of an emotional vinaigrette
a snap shot of once seeing eyes
sunrise
has always infected me
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?