07-16-2010, 02:25 PM
I guess I better get this out of the way, and say I found the poem very offensive 
, as it implied that disabled people should feel glad when people laugh at them, ergo its okay (that's how I read it anyway)
Not much to say aout thee poetic style and form... form-wise its very good (Just change weak kneed to "weak-kneed" though).
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Hmm... after I re-read it, that ending seems to be quite sad. Perhaps I misinterpreted your point? Did you mean to humanize the disabled child, thus condemning the people who were making fun of him?
, as it implied that disabled people should feel glad when people laugh at them, ergo its okay (that's how I read it anyway)Not much to say aout thee poetic style and form... form-wise its very good (Just change weak kneed to "weak-kneed" though).
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Hmm... after I re-read it, that ending seems to be quite sad. Perhaps I misinterpreted your point? Did you mean to humanize the disabled child, thus condemning the people who were making fun of him?
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?