Blind

[addy]

I like this poem of yours, LB. It's got... I don't know how to put it. Personality? Anyway, it reads a little different, which I like.

I guess I was an average chick
Since, no need for comma I dealt with an average dude like yourself
only because I was infatuated with the thought
of having someone there to take away the
insufficient planted in my veins

And I was eager to avoid becoming
apart of the single black female statistics
So, I swallowed your vulgar words and
ignored your constant physical threats
Even though, no need for comma it made my stomach empty I think it would be more interesting if you heightened the parallel between "swallowing words" and your "empty stomach" by putting those lines closer together.

All this because I didn't want to
go to bed and wake up alone
yet, deep down I was alone

I began to feed into your lies
and your manipulated "manipulating?" motives
which fucked me up in the head even more
misery loves company and we were both
enjoying each other

I became addicted and obsessed with false love "addicted" and "obsessed" mean very similar things in this context, so you can either drop one or replace it
despite, my intuition told me something else
even when I tried to escape
it's like you trapped me to stay and deal
with more months of pain

Now, I`m left with scar of memories
and offensive words that shouts in my head
every other second and all i see is images
of your face - eating alive my soul don't think you need to qualify soul as "alive"
piece by piece