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The Dog's Bollocks.

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07-09-2010, 09:39 AM

Thanks for the comments billy Smile

All very helpful, especially your suggestion for rewriting line 1 and 2... looked, much, much better!

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?

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Snake Oil - by addy - 07-06-2010, 02:46 PM

RE: Snake Oil - by billy - 07-09-2010, 09:25 AM

RE: Snake Oil - by addy - 07-09-2010, 09:39 AM

RE: Snake Oil - by heslopian - 10-09-2010, 12:07 AM

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