Something's Missing

[billy]

music doesn't satisfy my ears anymore
laughter feels forced
anger is hidden from a crowd
but, reappears when alone
your touch disappoints me
stones are in my throat love this line
for, I am mute and instead of for, no comma
something's missing
dreams are shattered into the broken glass really old cliche LB
where I see my face and future when instead of where
I am not myself
I am hidden behind your controls i love this line as well

for me something else would be better than broken glass, (or to a thousand pices )

"would dreams are shrapnel" work?
with a little teak i think you have a decent one here LB
try not to use too may I's. thanks for the write as always JMO.