Virgin (content warning )

[addy]

Nice to see another poem from you LB Just a few quick comments, skipping those already mentioned

Slowly you lay my body
on the silky sheets
the lights dimmed low
the voice of marvin gaye Hmm... is this guy an older guy or something? i know marvin gaye stuff is quintissential sexy music, but is he what you younguns still listen to? I don't mean to tease, I genuinely don't know
echoing throughout the room

candles surrounding our bodies
fear in my eyes, as my body trembled
self conscious about my bare body repetition of the word "body"but, you reassured me it was alright
passionately you caressed my breast

strawberry dipped in chocolate in my mouth
and you, sucked my inner thighs
then worked your way inside me with your tongue
I continued to tremble maybe another word for tremble this time

uncontrollably I began to sweat
And hold back the tears
as you entered inside me deeply
I tried to let my mind wander
forget about the harsh pain
I felt in my stomach
all because I love you ♥

As billy noted, you seem to be trying to go either one way or the other, with romantic imagery versus raunchy imagery. I think one way you can reconcile this is to take advantage of the scenario you were going for; the voice of the narrator could be imagining the romantic aspects and trying to detach herself, but keeps getting pulled back to the scary, violent reality of the act. Just a suggestion, but you could go anywhere with this