06-27-2010, 07:00 AM
Wonderful piece. The only thing I noticed was that at the beginning, you mentioned that you were watching the sky from your side mirror, implying you were watching from inside your car. But that detail became a bit superfluous by the end, when you mentioned noticing th grassy puddle in the field, implying you were standing outside (unless I misunderstood and it's actually a big puddle 
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Anyway, very nice. The bit about the mountains and the puddle were my fave
)Anyway, very nice. The bit about the mountains and the puddle were my fave
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?