Growing Sunrise
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I adore the image in your final stanza, and I honestly like the progressive description of a sunrise. You could afford to knock a few words out to tighten the imagery.

e.g.
the clouds picked
up more colors:

a dash
of orange

a spray
of yellow

Otherwise, you did very well.
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Growing Sunrise - by Bianca Alabaster - 06-23-2010, 12:22 PM
RE: Growing Sunrise - by digna_sofia - 06-23-2010, 05:24 PM
RE: Growing Sunrise - by billy - 06-24-2010, 06:17 AM
RE: Growing Sunrise - by Bianca Alabaster - 06-24-2010, 01:32 PM
RE: Growing Sunrise - by addy - 06-27-2010, 07:00 AM
RE: Growing Sunrise - by Bianca Alabaster - 07-01-2010, 01:30 PM



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