06-22-2010, 02:58 PM
Let's see... billy suggested you can do with a few concrete images. One easy way you can do this is to pick one image/metaphor, and use that as inspiration for other images in the poem.
Just as an example, your title is "Prisoner", so you can strengthen the messages of your poem by using imagery related to a prison or anything about being imprisoned. For instance, in the verse about being mute, you can talk about being gagged, or compare your voice to heavy, creaking chains. Something like that.
You don't have to do it that way, but its just one suggestion in order to sprinkle a few more concrete images there
Just as an example, your title is "Prisoner", so you can strengthen the messages of your poem by using imagery related to a prison or anything about being imprisoned. For instance, in the verse about being mute, you can talk about being gagged, or compare your voice to heavy, creaking chains. Something like that.
You don't have to do it that way, but its just one suggestion in order to sprinkle a few more concrete images there
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?