06-19-2010, 08:46 PM
I really love your poetry, its always fascinating. That opening stanza in part two really threw me for a loop 
Though I don't dislike the ending, it somehow left me... unsatisfied isn't the word at all. But something to close and round out the idea of the poem better (maybe, perhaps, the two lines could easily belong to a part three?
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But wow, its lovely as is
Though I don't dislike the ending, it somehow left me... unsatisfied isn't the word at all. But something to close and round out the idea of the poem better (maybe, perhaps, the two lines could easily belong to a part three?
)But wow, its lovely as is
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?