Untiltled ... mild critique

[billy]

Gone is childlike innosence
with fading accountability.
Endlessly wanting,
endlessly searching,
endlessly gathering,
the spoils of desire
only to stuff ourselves empty

innocence on the first line.

funny but i get a sense of going from one childhood to another kath
i love the irony and the futility of the last line. and our ability to do it.
period o the last line btw.
the more i read it the more i see in it, it has a certain depth to it
thanks for the read, great to see you doing a poem


would the work instead of is on the first line?

Ya I like it ... Gone the childlike innocence
not sure what you mean about getting a sense of going from one childhood to another?
Thanks for the spell-check and grammer check ... never was good at either one.
if there's anything else to add please do ... I can handle it and appreciate the help.

if you have adult kids, you should remember telling them to grow up, that they're acting like children.

a child can get contentment from the wanting searching and getting

all too often adults only think they want something much more so than real kids sometimes. when in fact it's just a trophy they're after. jmo