Looking at the Children’s Home By William Marsland.

[billy]

Well Billy, guess I'm an old fashioned romantic... loved the whole piece but the last line.
ruined it for me.
it was a beautiful - paradise journey and then - ick at the end

I'd prefer something like:

feeds the open beaks or feeds her hungry young

just my opinion though

thanks for the feedback Bianca, i can't give a reason other than blame my upbringing

i was trying to show that nothing really cared about the man or the boy. that life goes on regardless. i'll think about what you said when i do an edit though