06-09-2010, 09:17 AM
I agree with what you said, but I'm afraid. There is power in emotion / passion. It indeed was a floodgate or what I consider a poet's rant. Like a prose. I'm afraid to shorten it because it seems to me everything in there is important.
I am a tree hugger and an environmentalist, I am a people-lover, super patriotic, a despise injustice and really feel super strongly that people are not allowed to grieve in society any more.
There is symbolism in the piece too. I am afraid to edit it. Like I would ruin it. I'm not saying it is perfect, mind you. I know it isn't, but it's expressive. OK, confusing babbling over.
What would you suggest, now that you know more from the author's point of view? Thanks very much.
I am a tree hugger and an environmentalist, I am a people-lover, super patriotic, a despise injustice and really feel super strongly that people are not allowed to grieve in society any more.
There is symbolism in the piece too. I am afraid to edit it. Like I would ruin it. I'm not saying it is perfect, mind you. I know it isn't, but it's expressive. OK, confusing babbling over.
What would you suggest, now that you know more from the author's point of view? Thanks very much.
Bianca 