06-08-2010, 12:33 PM
Wow! I think digna pretty much covered all the surface corrections.
I think you should add an extra stanza here. With the poem this short, the focus you put on the birds comes off a little random (imo, anyway). But its a thoughful, visually luscious piece nonetheless
I think you should add an extra stanza here. With the poem this short, the focus you put on the birds comes off a little random (imo, anyway). But its a thoughful, visually luscious piece nonetheless
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?