11-09-2026, 03:34 AM
(11-09-2026, 03:19 AM)robdaley Wrote:Ok - I will give it a deeper read and offer more feedback later(11-09-2026, 02:33 AM)milo Wrote:Hi Milo, lol I have amended.(11-09-2026, 01:55 AM)robdaley Wrote: She kneels in the long grass, hiddenSo the grass is hidden ? How do you hide grass?
with the landmines.
Picking a leaf stalk, she teases it open --
a sheen of sap swells.
With brimming brown eyes, she blows
a bubble, big as a bomb.
As forces push out, it floats
through brittle air.


