hangnail

[hylas]

cool leather seating

sits polished - polished is redundant given its reflecting. I guess it implies it's been sat in a lot but that doesn't seem interesting.

reflecting buzzing streetlamps - I'm now confused if the speaker is inside or outside. Maybe it's a leather chair on a porch?
in satin finish - saying almost the same thing for the 3rd time.

bugs zip past your eye, intent
on unseen light

and two gazes
meet

your eyes dart quickly to your
hidden thumbs, and - can your eyes dart to your thumbs if they're hidden?

tears threaten to overflow
your eyelids - too explicit / melodramatic for my taste, the poem would work fine without this stanza

tempting as the hangnail is,
you know better

than to try and
rip it out

I like the core of this, it's a nice mood + I like the ending. The main issues are a bit of redundancy, too many adjectives, and the stanza about the tears being too explicit for my taste. I'm also a bit confused by some of the line breaks, they seem a bit arbitrary.