Borzoi
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(Today, 06:15 AM)hylas Wrote:  Borzoi

Loping like a ghost along the wet black pavement,
the white dog is trotting on beside the gutter full
of moon-beams and blossom and delicate
orbs that are the images of skulls of mannequin
all leering like corpses from the sex-shop front.
maybe "trots on" more active and better sound
same maybe for "mannequin skulls"
such an arresting image
great payoff at the end, enough weight accrued in the buildup that it doesn't feel like a cheap trick

yeah bravo
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Borzoi - by hylas - Today, 06:15 AM
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