First attempt

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[b] 11 Things I Hate About Myself[/b]

I hate the way I let you down,
And all the promises I made.
I hate that when you trusted me,
I gave you reasons to be afraid.

I hate the ways I made you cry,
the hurt and all the rest.
I hate that I gave you my worst,
when you deserved my best

I hate the way I chose to drink,
When you were begging me to change.
I hate the times I wasted away,
And always stayed the same.

I hate the way I took you for granted,
And thought you’d always stay.
I hate my never made time for,
And let the moments slip away.

I hate that I can’t change the past,
Or take back all I put you through.
I hate that it took losing you,
To see things I failed to do.

But mostly,

I hate that I made you feel unloved,
 loving you was never hard.

Not even close.

Not even a little bit.

Not even at all.

Hi and welcome to the Pen.

For me, the somewhat consistent meter pulled me along allowing me to read all the way through. I think the change up at the end aids the poem. You'll find a thread on Meter in the important Threads of this forum.

While the poem is nicely clear for me it sits on the surface, a common story told plainly. I never get a sense of how the Narrater feels under the sorry and never get a feel for their lost love. You might try to take a stab at taking the poem deeper by adding a remembered image or comparing the situation to something we wouldn't ordinarily think of.

You've got something to works with, I hope you enjoy the site. Please don't forget to leave a meaningful comment for someone else, reading some of the poems might also help you with yours.